🙂 I liked it, it is rushed.anonymous readerReport 2013-03-29 14:32:38I really didn’t care for the ‘Rose’ character in this story. ass porn I’m looking forward to seeing your work again :)«123» Next, never write something cliche like `Enough about me`, especially when you have barely written a paragraph about the character. 🙂 I liked it, it is rushed.anonymous readerReport 2013-03-29 14:32:38I really didn’t care for the ‘Rose’ character in this story. I find it hard to believe you would be satisfied with this story if you reread it yourself. Also, proofread your stories. Finally, if you are going to write a sex story, or any story for that matter, make the theme, in this case, the actual sex, take up more than 4 paragraphs. Still, pretty good, I’m just here to make it better.anonymous readerReport 2013-03-28 21:50:39the story built up nicely until you got to the sex part and then it went along too fast with a poor description of the sex itself. . . . . . … No offense. Also, proofread your stories. I’m looking forward to seeing your work again :)«123»
