18 comments«1234»Anonymous readerReport 2016-03-21 14:09:50It was a good start but you really need to finish the story before you submit it.Anonymous readerReport 2013-12-26 18:50:27another crappy chapter that FAILS to give proper background or character development. 18 comments«1234»Anonymous readerReport 2016-03-21 14:09:50It was a good start but you really need to finish the story before you submit it.Anonymous readerReport 2013-12-26 18:50:27another crappy chapter that FAILS to give proper background or character development. Anal sex WHERES ALL THE BACKGROUND?? USE YOUR HEAD FOR MORE THAN A SEAT CUSHION AND POST IN GERMAN OR USE AN ENGLISH EDITOR. AS IS THIS SUCKS BIG TIME AND NEEDS A TOTAL REWRITE AFTER DELETING THE ORIGINALS.anonymous readerReport 2013-01-14 14:22:57once again you totally ruined it by rushing the action. they could both be posted as one chapter and need to be two or three times longer.anonymous readerReport 2013-01-10 01:11:12Is their going to be a part three«1234» delete both stories and rewrite them properly. give back your high school diploma ( if you ever got one ) you don’t deserve it.anonymous readerReport 2013-07-19 21:40:31since you were taught to speak and write in german WHY THE HELL ARE YOU POSTING IN ENGLISH? delete both stories and rewrite
